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How to Write the Yeshiva University Essays 2022-2023

Yeshiva University requires all applicants to answer one prompt with three options. Applicants to one of the University’s honors programs must fill out a separate application, which has four required supplemental essays.

 

All applicants should note that Yeshiva has prompts that are both on the longer side and incredibly open-ended, so make sure you give yourself plenty of time to draft, write, and revise your responses. In this post, we’ll cover how you should approach these open-ended essays that make up a crucial component of your application.

 

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Yeshiva University Supplemental Essay Prompts

 

All Applicants (Choose one of the following)

 

Option 1: Describe a time in your life when you decided to go outside your comfort zone. What was the outcome of your decision? Would you have made the same decision looking back on the experience, or would you make a different decision? (500-750 words)

 

Option 2: Highlight an example in your life, where you have exemplified compassion (Torat Chessed) and the impact it has had on you on a personal level and/or within your community. (500-750 words)

 

Option 3: How has COVID impacted your self-image? What have you learned about yourself, both your strengths and areas requiring resiliency? (500-750 words)

 

Honors College Applicants

 

Prompt 1 (Choose one of the following)

 

  • Option A: In the Yeshiva University Honors program, our students celebrate their successes as well as reflect on opportunities for growth in the future. Which achievement or success are you most proud of and why? What do you hope to achieve in the future? (750-1000 words)
  • Option B: How have your experiences over the last few years impacted your self-image? What have you learned about yourself, both your strengths and areas requiring resiliency? (750-1000 words)

 

Prompt 2: What is one human achievement or innovation you would like to see in your lifetime? (150 words)

 

Prompt 3: When meeting someone for the first time, what do you want them to know about you but generally do not tell them? (150 words)

 

Prompt 4: Please describe something about which you are passionate. If you would like, please feel free to share a link to a video which best illustrates this passion. The link can be a found video, such as from YouTube, or can be an original video filmed on your own. (150 words)

 

All Applicants, Option 1

Describe a time in your life when you decided to go outside your comfort zone. What was the outcome of your decision? Would you have made the same decision looking back on the experience, or would you make a different decision? (500-750 words)

 

If there was ever a time where you urged yourself to do something outside of your comfort zone that led to an unexpected, important, or formative outcome, this is an option you may want to consider responding to.

 

Before you begin writing, brainstorm specific memories. Think of any experience outside your comfort zone that you can reflect thoughtfully on, and that showcases your personal growth. Once you have your list, you can mentally filter it in order to choose one experience that exhibits three things:

 

  • The experience should be something genuinely outside of your comfort zone.
  • The experience should have an important outcome. A trivial experience will make for an essay that lacks an important moral/lesson.
  • The experience should be something you remember vividly enough to write about in detail.

 

Here are some examples of experiences that you could write a strong essay about:

 

  • You’re part of the baseball team, and there’s one student with autism (Randy) who is always made fun of and excluded. Everyone is afraid to stand up for him for fear of being ostracized themselves. You decide to invite Randy to a team dinner one day, and you pick him up and arrive together. While the other members are initially unwilling to engage with you both, the others become interested when Randy pulls out a deck of cards and starts doing magic tricks. The others even ask to be taught those tricks, and you’re glad to see everyone finally interact kindly with Randy. 
  • You decided to run for class president against the wildly popular “incumbent.” While the current president was well-liked as a person, you felt that he was too focused on organizing school social gatherings, and wasn’t paying enough attention to student issues like internet filters and the lack of Kosher food in the cafeteria. You decided to run against him, despite being more of a reserved person. You ultimately didn’t win the election, but were able to draw more attention to these issues, and you made strides in overcoming your fear of public speaking. You’ll continue to fight for these issues by attending school board meetings.

 

These two examples illustrate an experience with an auspicious outcome, but you don’t have to use this approach. The prompt asks if you would have made the same decision or a different one looking back. You can choose one of these two angles to craft your response:

 

  • You stepped out of your comfort zone and the outcome was positive. Because of this, you grew in some way as a person, still try to step out of your comfort zone more often, and would have always made the same decision looking back.
  • You stepped out of your comfort zone and the outcome was negative. Because of this, you learned something about yourself or the world, accepted that sometimes stepping out of your comfort zone will not pan out ideally, and would have made a more informed decision looking back.

 

There are opportunities for growth no matter how the experience went. Whichever approach you take, emphasize your change or personal growth in your reflection.

 

Once you’ve selected an experience and begin to outline your essay, recall that this supplement has a fairly large word limit. You have plenty of room to build your narrative, so make sure you describe not only the situation, but also your mental state both at the time and since this event happened.

 

The larger word count also means you have space to show off your writing skills with vivid, memorable descriptions. Take the second example from above. Say you’re describing your experience overcoming your fear of public speaking. Below are some examples to illustrate the kind of writing you should be going for.

 

Example 1: Before I gave my speech, I was extremely nervous. 

 

Example 2: As I waited in the wings of the stage, old, familiar nerves started to wash over me. Sweat prickled on my palms and the back of my neck, and my stomach felt like I had left it at the top of a roller coaster drop.

 

If your first draft looks more like example 1, that’s okay! At that stage of drafting, you’re just trying to get your ideas down. Once you’ve solidified the body of your essay, you can start worrying about the finer details, as these are the kinds of things that will take your response from good to great.

 

Be sure to answer all parts of the prompt, as it asks several questions. The outcome of your decision and your reflection on the experience are most important, so dedicate more space to these parts of the prompt. If you can, use no more than half of your word count to describe what occurred. If you can’t, consider writing about a less involved experience.

 

The admissions committee is more concerned with how you take initiative, face potentially undesirable outcomes, learn from your experiences, and reflect on your decisions than they are in the logistics of what exactly happened. That being said, you should still be vivid in your description of events to demonstrate your investment in responding to the prompt well. A very dry, uninterested description of the event will imply that the event and its outcomes aren’t too important to you.

 

All Applicants, Option 2

Highlight an example in your life, where you have exemplified compassion (Torat Chessed) and the impact it has had on you on a personal level and/or within your community. (500-750 words)

 

This prompt can be seen as a slightly more specific version of the fairly common “Impact on Community” essay. Check out CollegeVine’s guide to writing the community service essay for some in-depth tips and examples! The goal of this prompt is to show how you engage with the people around you. Universities want to admit students who are going to make a positive impact on their community. Yeshiva, in particular, wants to see how you exemplify Chessed, a Hebrew word in the Torah often translated as “loving kindness.”

 

Before writing, you should do a fair bit of reflection on your life and service experiences. Consider these questions during your brainstorming:

 

Do you have a deep involvement with a community service-based club or organization? If not, have you ever shown true altruism or selflessness, or dedication to a cause that reflects these values like activism, social change, and social justice?

 

We normally recommend sticking to long-standing commitments, but given the wording of this prompt, you can discuss short-term projects like a week-long service trip. You can also consider smaller moments of service (like keeping a woman company at a nursing home over the course of a year). The concept of Torat Chessed encompasses many acts of kindness and charity.

 

The event shouldn’t be really short (e.g., carrying an old woman’s groceries to her home once), but single-day events are fine if they express those traits (e.g., if you spent a couple of hours helping a new family move into the neighborhood). Ideally, this single-day event should be connected to longer-standing personal values.

 

If you’re struggling to think of any events in which you showed deep compassion, then are there any activities that you participate in that might have a positive social impact? For example, if you do administrative or secretarial work that helps keep a medical clinic running efficiently, that has an indisputably positive impact.

 

For the event, activity, or job that you choose, mull over the following questions:

 

  • What exactly happened?
  • What did you think and how did you feel during the experience?
  • Have your feelings about what happened changed since then? If so, how? If not, why do you think these feelings are so solidified?
  • How can the values reflected in your actions (altruism, activism, generosity, etc.) be reconciled with the idea of Torat Chessed expressed in the prompt?
  • What is the positive outcome that was generated as a result of this activity or event?

 

In some cases, this will be very tangible (e.g., Amnesty International working for human rights, or March of Dimes working for cancer). In other cases, it will be more intangible (provide comfort and companionship, make a new family feel more comfortable in the neighborhood).

 

Bear in mind that “community” is a broad term and can refer to many different groups. Communities can comprise people who share a hometown, ethnicity/race, gender, country of origin, language, income class, illness/disability, or interest/activity. Your choice of community is not as important as your role within it.

 

The prompt asks how the particular instance impacted you personally and/or your community. While you may have experienced immense personal growth from your experience, we recommend that you write about either solely community impact or impact on yourself and your community. Writing solely about the impact your actions had on you can be done well, but you don’t want to unintentionally sound pretentious or privileged. The point of this prompt is to discuss the impact your compassion had on your growth or on those around you, not to make yourself seem like some sort of savior (even inadvertently).

 

Once you’ve decided on your particular event, be sure to describe it in detail. For example, compassion stories may take shape like this:

 

  • A student volunteers twice a month at her local veterinarian’s office (her act of compassion). She has always been very compassionate toward animals and sees vulnerable, injured, or sick animals as deserving of her time and care. Her caring instinct has spilled over into her social and family life and into her views on social justice (the impact her act has on her and on her community).

 

  • A student constantly visits a shopkeeper he lives near, even when he has nothing to buy, so he can relay messages from his grandfather (his act of compassion). His grandfather and the shopkeeper were close friends in their youth, but his grandfather’s difficulty getting around and the shopkeeper’s busy schedule have reduced the frequency of their conversation. The student’s recurrent visits to the store allow the two friends to keep in touch and maintain a strong friendship (the impact his compassion has on others).

 

As long as you show a sincere act of compassion that has had a genuine impact on at least one other person, you should have a strong essay. Remember, compassion starts with the individual, so don’t fret if you don’t have a huge story in which you influenced a whole class, school, town, or even nation. Even compassion on the smallest of scales can be meaningful.

 

All Applicants, Option 3

How has COVID impacted your self-image? What have you learned about yourself, both your strengths and areas requiring resiliency? (500-750 words)

 

This option may be tempting to you because you probably have a lot to think about with respect to COVID. However, even though self-reflection is good, this option should not be taken as a place to ramble or vent in an unstructured way. We recommend that you choose this option only if you have come to some substantial conclusions about your strengths and weaknesses during the pandemic.

 

Being restricted in some way, whether it be a lockdown in your town or a period of isolation while you had COVID, often creates an opportunity to become introspective. If you were stuck in one place for an extended period of time because of the pandemic, especially if you had limited communication with others, you may have done a lot of self-reflection. This could have brought you to a multitude of conclusions, but you want to have a balanced tone throughout your essay, so try to keep the number of strengths and areas requiring resiliency about even.

 

When thinking about how you are going to respond to this prompt, you may want to look at CollegeVine’s guide to writing the “Overcoming Challenges” essay. This prompt is more specific than a general “Overcoming Challenges” prompt, but you might want to approach it by thinking about the challenges COVID has created for you and how your view of yourself has been changed as a result of these challenges.

 

You have a large word count to work with, so you can be vivid in your writing. You might wish to zoom into an experience – for example, being home during a lockdown – and reflect on how it revealed things about yourself you might not have known.

 

Some people spent their time at home picking up a new skill or honing an old talent. Maybe, being home with not much to do, you decided to learn an instrument or a new language you had never considered studying before. And maybe you even found that you had an aptitude for it! Discovering new abilities or hobbies that you gained experience in is a perfect way to introduce one of your strengths. This is especially helpful if the skill pertains to your desired major.

 

For example, a student who began writing during the pandemic might describe a strength like this:

 

The day after the lockdown was announced, I sat at my desk, afraid of what was to come and confused about what to do. Just then, a bird landed on my windowsill. It was a beautiful little sparrow, and something about it gave me a feeling of immense peace. I wrote a little poem about the bird [feel free to insert a sample of your creative work if it’s not terribly long].

 

Three days into the lockdown, I had written two more poems. After another week, I had a notebook with twenty-three in it. The COVID pandemic forced me to retreat, both physically into my home and emotionally into my mind. And though I initially had felt as if I was sinking inward emotionally, I was actually flourishing outward creatively, like a rose opening up in the spring dew. I discovered a love for poetry that has actually compelled me to want to major in Creative Writing.

 

I continued penning poems in my free time well after the lockdown order was lifted. Three small poetry publications are reviewing submissions of mine, and two websites have already published my work…

 

This example works for several reasons. The student quickly establishes her setting and contextualizes her feelings about the lockdown. She then explains how the COVID-induced setting influenced her pursuit of a creative endeavor, which became one of her biggest passions and personal strengths.

 

Remember, no one is perfect, especially not during such trying times. You should think of instances during the COVID era in which you needed a quality you either didn’t have at all or hadn’t developed enough. Perhaps you argued with your family often and learned that your patience is lacking a little. Or maybe you kept moving from thing to thing, be it schoolwork or entertainment, and discovered that your attention span could use some work. The qualities you decide to write about don’t need to be things you learned about and immediately solved. Simply recognizing that there are areas where you have to be resilient in order to improve works for this essay.

 

Whatever you choose to write about, make sure you’re sincere. The admissions committee isn’t looking for any specific answer, so don’t write one that doesn’t apply to you or try to pander to them. It will not be hard to spot if you are writing about a strength or weakness that you don’t actually have. When you write your response, really look inward and be honest with yourself. Be humble when describing your strengths and express your desire for growth when describing your weaknesses.

 

Honors College Applicants, Prompt 1, Option A

In the Yeshiva University Honors program, our students celebrate their successes as well as reflect on opportunities for growth in the future. Which achievement or success are you most proud of and why? What do you hope to achieve in the future? (750-1000 words)

 

This prompt is structured so that it can do three things:

 

  • It gives Yeshiva an idea of something you’re good at and proud of.
  • It sheds light on what you value about yourself currently, and how that will shape what you want to do in the future.
  • It ideally shows the admissions committee that even in success, you are humble.

 

Brainstorm a list of the things you’re most proud of. These can be small or large in scope, but keep in mind that the achievements you are most proud of should be the most emotionally meaningful to you, regardless of scale.

 

Remember, there’s no “right” answer because this essay is about you. Students often see a prompt like this and wrack their brains trying to find something they’ve done with a huge social impact or charitable contribution to impress the admissions committee. You don’t need to do this and probably shouldn’t, as an insincere response is easy to spot.

 

Perhaps you’re an avid chess player and will never forget the first time you won a tournament. Or maybe you’ve never been a great test-taker, but you studied hard for months for the SAT and got an amazing score. These aren’t necessarily large in scope, but they are valid achievements and can be sources of great pride, so they’re fair game.

 

What’s far more important than the what is the why. Your reasons for being proud of whatever your achievement you choose to write about are personal and will be quite revealing. Let’s say, for example, that two students independently and coincidentally write about the same source of pride – performing a song in their respective high school talent shows. Take a look at their individual reasons to see the variety personal motivations can have:

 

  • Student 1: My proudest achievement is having sung a song in my school’s talent show last year. I’ve always been really shy, but I never really had stage fright in middle school plays. Even though it was daunting to make friends in the cafeteria or raise my hand during class, I just knew I could make an impression on people if I could just get on a stage. Then the talent show came around and I finally got my chance. The stage lights glimmered in my eyes, making it impossible to see anyone in the crowd. This was my time to show everyone that I had a voice. So that’s just what I did. My closest friend, Jamie, played guitar next to me and I sang, quietly at first, but then louder as I got more comfortable. When I finished, everyone cheered. People finally knew who I was.
  • Student 2: My proudest moment is the night I proved my bullies wrong. I used to be picked on for watching musical theatre clips at lunch. I thought the bullies were right that I was weird. One day, I hid out in the music room after school and started plinking out my favorite song on the keyboard. The music teacher heard me and begged me to perform in the talent show. Obviously, having been bullied into my shell, I was very reluctant to make my presence known, but Mr. Jones convinced me. The night of the show, it felt like my nerves would prevent my fingers from even moving, but when I sat at the piano and looked down at those keys, my trepidation melted away. I sang my heart out and got a standing ovation. After that night, even the bullies were impressed. They respected me and stopped picking on me. And that’s when I finally embraced who I was and stopped feeling shame for liking something different.

 

In the first example, the student’s pride in her accomplishment stems from her ability to not be shy in a new context after having been timid everywhere else. In the second, the student’s pride comes from how he embraced the thing he loved and overcame being bullied in the process.

 

The reason you are proud of your chosen accomplishment can be related to the impact you had on people, the initiative you finally took, the difference you made in your life or someone else’s, or anything really, as long as it’s meaningful and genuine.

 

The next part of the prompt asks you to identify what you hope to achieve in the future. This is another open-ended question. It doesn’t have to be related to the achievement you just described, but that might help with the continuity of your essay. For example, if your proudest achievement is having helped plant a hundred trees in your neighborhood, maybe you want to create a conservation-based start-up company after college.

 

You should reflect on how the things you’ve accomplished have influenced who you are today. Maybe your greatest accomplishment was being a tutor throughout high school and getting seven of your classmates to improve their SAT scores by over 100 points. This experience might have shown you your natural capacity for teaching. You could use this to describe how you wish to become a teacher or open up a tutoring center in the future.

 

You have a very large word count to work with, so be as detailed as you can be when describing your accomplishment, explaining the reasons for your pride, and examining your future goals. Also make sure to balance your pride with humility. There’s a difference between justified pride in an achievement and arrogance; choose your words carefully so your writing doesn’t inadvertently move into the latter.

 

Honors College Applicants, Prompt 1, Option B

How have your experiences over the last few years impacted your self-image? What have you learned about yourself, both your strengths and areas requiring resiliency? (750-1000 words)

 

This prompt will be an exercise in self-reflection. Introspection can be difficult, but it is a very revealing process. You might want to start by thinking of how you’ve dealt with recent challenges. Being challenged often offers a chance to make an important decision, which can make for some meaningful reflections. You may wish to look at CollegeVine’s guide to writing the “Overcoming Challenges” essay to inspire your thinking.

 

You have a very large word count to work with, so you should be as specific and evocative as you can. Ideally you’ll have a small list of experiences to write about. There are a few things you should think about when trying to add to the list:

 

1) Consider experiences that demonstrate specific lessons you’ve learned about yourself.

 

You don’t want to write about some experience that has no takeaway or lesson. Any event you deem important enough to include in your essay should have taught you something substantial about yourself. Instead of recounting a dramatic event that had no long-term effect on you, choose something that changed the way you see yourself.

 

2) Try to avoid cliché topics unless you have a unique spin on them.

 

For example, you might be tempted to write about your family’s recent immigration to the United States. This isn’t a bad topic in and of itself, but it’s a very common one. Everyone’s experiences are unique, but you’re likely to have derived some of the same lessons that other immigrants wrote about.

 

3) Be sure to strike a balance between your strengths and weaknesses.

 

Besides the fact that the prompt explicitly asks for “both your strengths and areas requiring resiliency,” it would also be advantageous to keep the tone of your essay balanced. If you write only about events that reveal your strengths, you may come off as self-absorbed or arrogant. On the other hand, if you only write about events that revealed weaknesses, you might seem like you don’t have enough positive attributes to bring to the university.

 

Once you’ve thought up your list, you can write this essay with one of two approaches:

 

  • If your list consists of experiences with similar outcomes or events that led to similar conclusions, you can weave them together into one cohesive narrative with a focus on one or two major strengths and one or two areas requiring resiliency.
  • If your list consists of varied experiences, each with a different point of self-reflection, you might want to write a collection essay. This structure lends itself well to reflection because you have to put effort into describing feelings and emotional states to compensate for the “lack” of a story.

 

For instance, a student might have thought of the following events:

 

  • When she tutored a classmate for weeks, which improved his math grade by 2 letter grades
  • When she visited an old woman in a nursing home twice a month for a year, which clearly improved the woman’s emotional state over time
  • When she helped guide a group of children out of her building during a big blackout

 

All three of these experiences can potentially be tied to one big strength and one big weakness. Perhaps prior to these three experiences, the student didn’t know that she is great with people and has strong social skills, a strength she now embraces. But maybe each of these experiences was rather stressful because she doesn’t deal with time management well. This could be an area requiring resilience on her part.

 

Whatever you decide to write about, be fair to yourself. Be honest about your weaknesses and humble about your strengths, and you will have a compelling essay that is sure to tell the admissions committee a lot about yourself.

 

Honors College Applicants, Prompt 2

What is one human achievement or innovation you would like to see in your lifetime? (150 words)

 

This is the kind of prompt that will require some serious brainstorming, but once you’ve selected your topic the actual writing should be fairly straightforward.

 

You want to spend time considering what you’re going to write about because this prompt is an opportunity to show some creative thinking. You don’t want to write about things like space colonization or a cure for cancer because – even though those would certainly be remarkable achievements – they’re pretty cliché. Yeshiva wants to see that you can think about the world in a more nuanced way.

 

Here are some examples of things that you could write a strong essay about:

 

  • A clean water network that can supply the entire world
  • An earpiece that translates any language into the wearer’s native tongue
  • A method of perfectly restoring ancient paintings and statues

 

Though you only have 150 words, this should be more than enough to defend your choice. Perhaps the most important component of this essay is an explanation of why this particular innovation would be so meaningful to you. A meaningful personal connection to the chosen innovation is what separates great essays from good ones.

 

Take the restoration example. Maybe you’re an artist and you’ve drawn a lot of inspiration from classical art. You might write about how you were shocked when you learned that ancient Greek and Roman marble statues were originally painted, not just plain white. That knowledge made you feel that people can’t fully appreciate the ancient artists’ abilities. You hope that showcasing these works in their original forms will not only lead to celebration of ancient artists, but will also inspire modern artists like yourself and ultimately drive innovation in art.

 

As you ruminate on potential topics, remember to avoid taking a stance in any sort of political or controversial debate. You don’t know anything about the person who will be reading your essay, and you never want to unintentionally offend or anger someone (especially someone who is handling your admission into this university).

 

That being said, you shouldn’t write about how you hope to see a world where, for example, capitalism has been abolished. There are plenty of good topics, like the ones above, that don’t run the risk of ruffling any feathers.

 

Honors College Applicants, Prompt 3

When meeting someone for the first time, what do you want them to know about you but generally do not tell them? (150 words)

 

Responding to this prompt is relatively straightforward. You want to pick an important part of your personality or life experience, illustrate it with an example, and explain why you don’t tell people this up front.

 

If you’re having trouble brainstorming a topic, think about the situation the prompt describes more tangibly: what is something important about you that you generally don’t share, for whatever reason, when you first meet a new person in your life?

 

You’re likely going to have to get at least a little vulnerable in your response. Opening up about something rather private can be an uncomfortable thing to do with a total stranger, but remember that how personal you get in your essay is totally up to you. The thing you share should be meaningful, but it doesn’t have to be your deepest darkest secret.

 

For example, say you have had problems with anemia for most of your life, which affects your ability to play sports or do certain activities with your friends. You might not tell people this because you don’t want people to think of you as being less capable than anyone else. In order to illustrate this struggle, you might describe a time your friends were going on a hike, and you weren’t healthy enough to come, but you made up some excuse because you didn’t want them to pity you.

 

The thing you decide to write about doesn’t necessarily have to be negative either! Maybe you’re a very generous person who always donates to causes and volunteers at charitable organizations. Generosity is a wonderful trait you might want people to know about you, but perhaps you feel like talking about it too much might lead to them either trying to take advantage of your generosity or thinking you’re self-righteous.

 

You don’t have too many words to work with, but you can still tackle this prompt in a couple of ways structurally. You can get right to the point and simply say what the trait is then why you don’t tell it to people. Or you might find it helpful to include a relevant anecdote about what happened the last time you told someone about the trait. You have a good amount of freedom, just make sure that you mention the trait and your reasons for being reticent about it.

 

Remember that your goal, as with other college essays, is to teach your reader something about who you are or what makes you tick. If someone comes away from your response with a better understanding of who you are, you’ve written a successful essay.

 

Honors College Applicants, Prompt 4

Please describe something about which you are passionate. If you would like, please feel free to share a link to a video which best illustrates this passion. The link can be a found video, such as from YouTube, or can be an original video filmed on your own. (150 words)

 

This is another straightforward prompt: write about one of your passions. Keep in mind that you don’t have to try to impress the admissions officers. They already have your transcript, after all. There’s no need to write about overly intellectual subjects like particle physics or Baroque art, unless you are genuinely interested in them. If anything, reminding your reader that you’re more than just your GPA and activities list can inject some life into your application.

 

For example, you could write about your fascination with Taylor Swift’s lyricism. Or maybe you’re really interested in the unpredictable way in which college football players end up being good in the NFL.

 

If you want to write about something slightly more serious, you might talk about your desire for better public transportation in your hometown or the connection between physical exercise and mental health.

 

You should make sure that the passion you describe here isn’t already reflected anywhere else in your application. For example, if your activities list already includes your participation in local robotics competitions, you probably shouldn’t talk about robotics here. You only get so many chances to share yourself with the admissions committee, so don’t waste one by being redundant.

 

Additionally, as with most other prompts, you want to make sure you answer the question why. Your essay needs to say something about you, not the thing you’re writing about. For instance, if you write about NFL college scouting, you shouldn’t spend 150 words analyzing recent drafts.

 

Instead, describe how you believe everyone can be successful in the right environment. Talk about how you enjoy tracking players to see which ones are put in a position to succeed and which ones are set up to fail. This explanation shows your reader that you can think critically and that you are a thoughtful observer of the world around you.

 

If you think a video might help illustrate something about your passion, you should absolutely include one. Maybe you already have one in mind, or maybe you’re just  in the mood to spend some time browsing YouTube. If you have the requisite skills and something to say, you might even want to make your own video! Just don’t spend too many hours looking for or creating one. That might be fun, but probably isn’t the best use of your time in the thick of college applications season.

 

Where to Get Your Yeshiva University Essays Edited

 

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